Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on
everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in
a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people
believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that
affect them.
These days people believe that allowing children to be responsible for their own decisions will make them self-centred, but others contradict them. While I agree with the second motion, I believe that both sides have reasons for their justification, and should be understood.
First of all, people believing in the society of self-centered individuals is entirely situational. An individual shouldn’t be allowed to make only their decisions. They should connect and learn the choices resulting in giving opinions and feedback on decisions. This will result in a healthier society that will not be full of self-centred individuals. It can be opposite if the individuals do not connect or share opinions.
On the other hand, societies are filled with many people, and it is infrequent for a community to be filled with introverts who do not connect. Thus we can consider that it is logically impossible for a society full of individuals who only think about their wishes. Giving children responsibilities for making their own decisions is necessary for their personal growth and the rest depends on nurture. A child making choices in a bad environment will only nurture him to be a self-centred person. In contrast, one in a pleasant surrounding will consider the effects on society when making decisions.
To sum up, children should be allowed to make their own decisions as it is essential to feel independent, but the results will matter in the nurture of children. If everyone is appropriately nurtured, a self-centred society of individuals will not exist, but one that focuses on growth for all individuals.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 145, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...led with introverts who do not connect. Thus we can consider that it is logically im...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, thus, while, in contrast, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1364.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22605363985 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13748891669 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513409961686 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 415.8 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.6417883662 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.4285714286 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6428571429 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329557202979 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122507840122 0.084324248473 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0801907548664 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218977958894 0.151304729494 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0181889885075 0.056905535591 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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