Some people believe citizens should be allowed to carry handguns in order to protect themselves, while others think this can lead to many social security problems in the society . What's your opinion ?
Citizen ownership of firearms has been a controversial debate for legislators. While the concept of allowing the equipment of weapons by citizens has been lawfully recognized in a few nations due to the belief that it can boost citizens' self-defence capabilities, others believe the social insecurity it causes outweighs its counterarguments. Personally speaking, I agree with the latter statement, illustrated by the following reasons.
First and foremost, guns are weapons designed to kill or wounded people, so it is undeniable that an increase in the rate of arms in the population will lead to a similar trend in crime rates. The allowance of citizens to have handguns is equivalent to allowing criminals easy access to weapons themselves, resulting in growing danger for the public. For instance, a comparison between the two countries of the USA and Japan has demonstrated the detrimental effects of gun ownership on a national scale, with considerable differences in various data, such as the death rates of officers during missions or the incredibly alarming homicidal incidents: 18000 and 14, showing the hazardous impact of armed offenders that the legislation has accidentally abetted.
Additionally, the psychological influence exerted upon a weaponized individual is irrefutable due to the weight of the damage a gun can bring.
In combination with the emotional aspect of humans and the intense atmosphere of the situation, it cannot be avoided that accidental actions may happen. And even in the most reasonable circumstances and sensible individuals, faulty errors might pop up, both in the human and equipment department. Allowing the free acquisition of firearms will have an adverse effect on society as it will result in an upturn in the probability of such incidental perpetrations, as indicated by various heartwrenching incidents reported on the media.
In conclusion, while persuasion for the legalization of unprohibited weapon access has a myriad of justifications, the negative consequences it can have on people are indisputable. Therefore the formalisation of such regulation should be objected to at all causes.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 181, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1817.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50606060606 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.38015191926 2.80592935109 120% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60303030303 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.3035720304 49.4020404114 179% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.416666667 106.682146367 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147821450358 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0482120523074 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493920559364 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0748943744836 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439170415769 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.0946893788 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.15 50.2224549098 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.29 8.58950901804 131% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 78.4519038076 168% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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