some people believe that a crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of bad person's nature. Discuss both view and give your opinion.
While many people believe that crime is a result of a bad person’s nature, I would argue that crime is a result of social problems and poverty.
On the one hand, crime is related to human essence since bad characteristics lead to problems in society. First of all, the majority of unemployed people possess laziness or selfishness, and thus mistake that finding a job is complicated. However, the most significant problem has always been themselves, because of their laziness, they rarely look for jobs seriously, because of their selfishness, others cannot adapt to them. Therefore, unemployment causes numerous social problems, they are not able to make money or contribute anything to the development of the world. Gradually, many enterprises or corporations do not provide working slots for the unemployed, as a result. Finally, most of them decide to commit crimes, not only to find money but also to do something meaningful in their life.
On the other hand, I believe that crime is the result of objective reasons, not only subjective ones because of several reasons. Firstly, adapting to the basic living standard is one of the most important causes. If either one deserves to earn a larger amount of money than he devotes to his company or he is even unemployed, he will work illegally to earn his living. Unfortunately, nowadays, finding an occupation has been harder and harder since the population density has been increasing faster and faster. As a consequence, the number of people who commit crimes is growing in popularity, leading to a lower living standard. Secondly, criminals hardly return after committing crimes and those who work illegally once would repeat it the next time. This is because a large number of companies cannot accept their public image becoming worse, thus rarely allowing criminals to come back again. For instance, in Korea, idols are managed so strictly that some of them suicide after a long duration of being idols.
In conclusion, although both views certainly have some validity, it seems to me that crime is the cause of social problems and poverty.
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Suggestion: many; numerous
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1759.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0838150289 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78711187118 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57225433526 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.2767822894 49.4020404114 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 109.9375 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.625 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.875 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26470357017 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841272444678 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118079954971 0.0667982634062 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226077306578 0.151304729494 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.143487279237 0.056905535591 252% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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