People have different views about whether celebrities can help worldwide aid organizations to highlight the significant issues or the problems that seem to be undervalued because of their involvement. From my point of view, I believe that serious problems could be more known by the public with the participation of public figures.
Some people assume that public figures could support worldwide aid organizations to promote awareness of pressing social issues. It is clear that celebrities such as models, actors, actresses, singers,... have a great influence on the general public due to their popularity in the global and a huge number of followers. By speaking out about the serious aspects, popular people will likely receive substantial support from their fans to raise more funds and action for the cause they are engaging in than an ordinary person. This would not only affect the public but also the media outlets to catch their attention to the problem represented by the organizations when they speak out for any charitable campaign or project. As a result, the message could be spread strongly in a wider range of populations. For instance, Emma Watson spoke up against the violence toward girls and women to alert the public about the problem and, at the same time, raising public awareness of gender equality rights.
On the opposite side, many people argue that well-known figures may make issues appear less serious. Due to their fame, media and residents might pay so much attention to the celebrities, in other words, their popularity overshadows the problems while media outlets tend to highlight and direct the concern of the public toward public figures instead of the aspect itself. It is obviously a counterproductive impact that makes the purpose of the project likely to be fulfilled. In addition, people could express a negative reaction to the serious news according to the bad image and scandals of celebrities or the public opinion deflected by haters. These influence negatively and directly the image of the charitable organizations and distort the original message of the cause and the involved campaign.
In conclusion, some people think that famous people can help international aid organizations to draw attention to important problems while others believe that celebrities can make the problems seem less important. I am still maintaining my opinion as the issues may appear to be less serious when well-known persons are involved
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, still, well, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2083.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 395.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27341772152 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84254760923 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516455696203 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 646.2 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.950208526 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.1875 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6875 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.625 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334722450699 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103324989128 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.130373742158 0.0667982634062 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242440723228 0.151304729494 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131799747607 0.056905535591 232% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.