Some people believe that the government should ban dangerous sporting activities, while others think that people should have the freedom to do whatever sports they choose. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Sport activities frequently bring the deaths and injuries, however, the media commonly provide the news which do not reverberate real reality. As a result, people have claimed that the authority should prohibit extreme sport activities, in contrast, some believe that everyone should have personal choice without any restriction. From my perspective, the policy of free choice is the key to being freedom.

On the one hand, it seems undeniable that some people enjoy going in for in sports, they are keen on overcoming difficulties to achieve advanced outcome, shaping their bodies. If the government deprive some kind of dangerous sport activity, these invent other type detrimental physical activities, probably, these inventions would be more damaging than existed harmful sports. For instance, some people drive out of the train for fun, acquiring pleasure moments. Moreover, numerous people with an attraction watch television, resulting in an increase of the number of individuals who participate in sports that is essential in any society, since physical exercises promote good health. Furthermore, nowadays sports could be considered as business also, make a profit by participants. Since numerous people are talented in sports, why should not they use this opportunity to strive to ensure advanced financial circumstance for relatives, family? Therefore, participating in sports is financial benefits for family members, provoking others to develop sport abilities. Watching sport broadcast motivates people to go in for sports and hence, heath community would be good.

On the other hand, injuring sportsmen require financial support to curing, so instead of funding developing infrastructures, the government sponsor money for these treatments.Moreover, it is necessary funds to provide sport equipments, maintaining, refurbishing sport building. Compared to seven decades ago, these days sport persons participate in international competition, comparing their physical achievement, sharing sport approaches, methods, however, this requests state financial implications. As a result, expenditure is necessary to treat damaging sportsmen, also additional implications are not possible to avoid to maintain extreme sports.

In conclusion, the government really spend the great proportion of state capital to maintaining damaging sports, nevertheless watching such sports stimulate human population to participate in sports, which guarantees people's health.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, really, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2127.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.99154929577 5.12529762239 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07468109216 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628169014085 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 649.8 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4247195704 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.9375 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1875 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4375 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.01903807615 359% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294937169182 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0954389545173 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656812384407 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173253390328 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0745191911312 0.056905535591 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.46 12.4159519038 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.15 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 78.4519038076 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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