Some people believe that government should take care of old people and provide financial support after they retire Others say individual should save during their working years to fund their own retirement What is your opinion Give reasons for your answer

It has been a controversy among the public is that several people suggest that the authority should be responsible for caring for the elderly citizens by giving financial aid after their retirements. However, others argue that each individual should use their allowance with they had saved during employment when they retire, and I advocate this opinion.

It is believed that saving money during working time will benefit our retirement days in the future. It is likely because it is essential to prepare for each person a sum of money. If a person retires, it is unsure whether his children will provide him financial support or the state has the ability to give him sufficient amount of cash for daily expenses. Therefore, saving money for later use will ensure us a well-fed life.

Another point is that saving allowance to use them in retirement days will help individuals in achieving what they want. As an illustration, workers or employees often do not have enough money to purchase what they pursuit and need. However, when they retire, with the amount of money they had saved, it is possible to afford everything that serves their desire and entertaining purposes, such as a mansion, a computer or a vacation to Europe. These can help them to have a more relaxing, enjoyable life when they reach the final stage of the life cycle.

In conclusion, although it is undeniable that elderly residents can benefit from the government's funding and financial aid, I strongly believe that saving our own cash to spend them in retirement will likely to grant us a more relaxing and sufficient life.

Votes
Average: 7.1 (2 votes)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1337.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95185185185 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62938183496 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559259259259 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 427.5 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.9337733288 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.545454545 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5454545455 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.09090909091 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277971274287 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0965681931166 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724783880465 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16585415733 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10615947031 0.056905535591 187% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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