Some people believe that young people should choose the jobs that they want, but other people think they should be more realistic and think more about their future.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
The debate over whether prioritising professional passion or practical considerations in career choice is increasingly pertinent to today’s young people. Personally, it is more prudent to invest in a career that can to a certain extent fulfill the both categories.
The advocates of following one’s passion often predicate their argument on the fact that passion could lead to job satisfaction, hence great achievements. This is because passion provides intrinsic motivation necessitating in pursuit of ambitious goals despite adversities, while the lack of such essential element would discourage a person from persevering through challenges they encounter. Consider the case of Ronaldo in realm of sports, his genuine interest in football has enabled him to achieve extraordinary successes, demonstrating that a true vocation empowers an athlete to surmount any obstacles countered on the path to achievements. For this reason, it is inevitable that passion is factored in an individual consideration of a career choice.
The critics of passion-driven approach point out that adamantly pursuing occupational interests may not always result in financial stability. This is evidenced by the fact that many renowned passionate artists, such as Van Gogh, endured enormous economic struggles throughout their careers, even after obtaining a certain degree of fame, let alone young artists. This means that a stable income is not always equivalent to huge passion. It is, nevertheless, of note the excessive emphasis on pragmatism in career choices hinders professional development since it is challenging for many young people to sustain long-term motivation in jobs that are solely driven by such extrinsic factors as monetary rewards and benefits packages. A High turnover rate in sales section is a prime example of this phenomenon where high income cannot retain employees for long. As a result, it is advisable for a young person to invest time in identifying a personal interest that is only financially viable but also personally fulfilling to enjoy a healthy work-life balance although such decision-making process will be long.
In conclusion, placing an emphasis on either passion or realistic elements might not be ideal as it is more rewarding for a young person to find the right balance between the two approaches.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, nevertheless, so, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1984.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.55742296919 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16631944993 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627450980392 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.1252775437 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.615384615 106.682146367 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4615384615 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.69230769231 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0889016469414 0.244688304435 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0293400887573 0.084324248473 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.030523999705 0.0667982634062 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0594252048623 0.151304729494 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0201758477036 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.5 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 78.4519038076 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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