Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars and pop musicians or sport stars are paid too much money.
Do you agree or disagree?
Which other types of jobs should be highly paid?
It is argued that people working in the entertainment industry, such as movie stars, music composers and sports stars, are being overpaid. I totally agree with this view, and I think that there are other types of jobs that are worthy of higher salaries.
There are two rationales for my opinion. To begin with, the money that entertainers receive is in contrast to the amount of work they do. They can easily earn a lot of money with a single job for a short period of time, while the vast majority of people have to work all year round to get the same amount or even significantly less than that. For example, a famous singer in Vietnam can get a great wealth up to a billion VND with a couple of songs. In addition, when it comes to social values, entertainers, in comparison with educators and healthcare workers, are less significant. This is because their work does not reflect the meaningful contribution to the whole community.
Therefore, I believe that teachers and healthcare employees deserve a larger wage. Educators are those working directly with students, the future labour force of a nation. They bear the responsibility of discovering and developing potential skills of learners, which helps them identify their career goals in later life. It is reasonable to say that teachers partly contribute to the upcoming development of a country. Moreover, doctors and nurses have proven their importance when the world has been facing new diseases. They deserve to gain recognition and higher incomes as they have saved millions of lives from fatal illnesses such as COVID-19. The pandemic is a particular example when the whole medical system had to work constantly to bring patients back to their lives.
In conclusion, I fully agree with the view that individuals in the entertainment industry are being paid too much. There are other types of jobs that need to get higher salaries, such as teachers and healthcare workers due to their great contributions to society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, in contrast to, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1660.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 333.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98498498498 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77249233376 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570570570571 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.5136250113 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6470588235 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5882352941 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35294117647 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148715169446 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0452135637791 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647204958406 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121651458435 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0891735886668 0.056905535591 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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