Some people prefer hobbies that require technology while some people think that hobbies do notvrequire technology Discuss both views and give your opinion

The opportunities that the new technologies brought to our lives has also changed the classic patterns of entertainment and made computer games and movies significant amusement source. There is a group of people who prefer hobbies that require endless hours in front of the computer screens. By contrast, the other group select traditional hobbies without technological devices. To my way of thinking, technology is both curse and gift. However, traditional hobbies are more advantageous in terms of human health.
On the one hand, it is commonly maintained that the modern technology offers a great deal of opportunities to the users. As computer games are more customizable than the real world, they can provide more hilarious and satisfying activities to the gamers. Moreover, advent of the new technologies in computer graphics provide us quite realistic view and scenes, which are hardly distinctive than the outside world. Additionally, some worldwide problems such as global pandemic, which is very actual issue, can prevent the traditional hobbies while making technology related activities inevitable.
On the other hand, traditional hobbies are safer for human health, while people can be victim to serious eye illnesses, which are one of the most noticeable problems of the last decades, with excessive use of computers or mobile phones. Furthermore, hobbies like running, hiking or camping even boosts human health and keep their body fit. Moreover, technological activities lead to addiction as they do not bore or tire their audience, resulting in high level of time consumption. Finally, technology related hobbies can wipe out the sense of challenge and success as they are mostly programmed to be straightforward and effortless for the users.
To conclude, in spite of the fact that modern technology can enhance the rate of entertainment and pleasure to some extent, they lead to serious and deleterious effects for the mankind.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, while, such as, in spite of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1648.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42105263158 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99924967533 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572368421053 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3245828344 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.714285714 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7142857143 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21428571429 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286159458743 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.095447058862 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524670944308 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162292633616 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529615390691 0.056905535591 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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