Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion
People have different views about what is the best way to help people improve their health. Providing more sports facilities is suggested as the best way to balance one’s well-being by some people, while the others advocate that more measures must be included. From my perspective , I support the latter in the belief that psychology and a healthy diet will also play a crucial role.
On the one hand, sports as we are all familiar with, have lots of benefits on our physical health. Having a fit and muscled body, boosting self-confidence and enhancing teamwork are the most popular advantages of sports so it understandable that sports facilities are now put in parks or at school without charging any penny to encourage people to take exercises on a regular basic. Statistically speaking, people who do sports regularly are proved to have less chances of coming down with common but serious diseases such as influenza or a sore throat. Therefore, when this plan is enacted together with the beneficial and economical advantages of sports, public health will be optimized.
On the other hand, the government must take the social and emotional life of each individual into account. People cannot take enough exercises like going to the gym or go jogging every morning when they have to deal with a heavy workload every day at work or coping with excessive demand from the company to fulfil a need of the growth in the national economy. Therefore, the best solution is to reduce the working hours to allow people to have time to take care of themselves as well as their families. Furthermore, a basic understanding of how bad the influence is if people don’t take enough workout should also be provided by organizing health campaigns, broadcasting more programs about human well-being and diets on TV are recommended to ensure that everyone receives the fair treatment.
In conclusion, although increasing sports facilities is highly encouraged as it creates motivation for people to be more aware of their health, I want to put greater emphasis on the other measures to guarantee that the public health is always developing at good rate.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, nevertheless, really, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, i think, as well as, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 10.4138276553 240% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1859.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 359.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1782729805 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85159555727 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590529247911 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 586.8 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.0843316444 49.4020404114 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.916666667 106.682146367 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9166666667 20.7667163134 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 7.06120827912 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205057012421 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0774043469753 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0729433100011 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137755801355 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0619677172593 0.056905535591 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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