With the development of medical facilities, people are getting more and more long-lived which causing a big influence on individual and social aspects. From my perspective, it brings both positive and negative outcomes urging all of us to take responses.
In the positive aspects, for one, to individuals, long-lived trend ables old people acquire more time to enjoy the life having fun without any anxiety of their healthcare. For another, old guys can help their children to look after grandchildren which can relieve working youth's pressure; Moreover, to the whole society, demands from old people contribute to the rise of the pension industry. For instance, China has the biggest developed potential around the world in the pension industry due to a huge increasing amount of old people.
Instead, in the passive aspect, firstly to personal, the trend of living longer heavy younger people's burden to take care of older people. Younger people are getting more and more pressure to their own work-life balance let alone provide for old parents; And then to the whole state, there will be a serious social problem we called it social aging academically which will reduce the amount of labor and the economic vitality, such as Japan has been suffering an economic turndown because of the social aging. Luckily, we are able to conduct measures to deal with it. Improving the pension plus insurance system, and introducing more immigrants like the Canadian government has been doing are some effective solutions to the aging problem.
In conclusion, the longevity trend will produce both positive and negative consequences for the whole human society. We should take action to face such a contradictory situation.
- some people say that it s better to teach language students in small classes whereas others think the number of people does not matter Discuss both sides and give your own opinion 56
- There is a growing demand for fresh water nowadays and this is becoming a global problem Discuss the possible causes for it What measures can be taken by governments and individuals to overcome this problem 84
- some people say that it s better to teach language students in small classes whereas others think the number of people does not matter Discuss both sides and give your own opinion 79
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, look, moreover, so, then, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1447.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24275362319 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69059005373 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.597826086957 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.118942158 49.4020404114 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.545454545 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0909090909 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.90909090909 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0767623357885 0.244688304435 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0280896329219 0.084324248473 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0191254061643 0.0667982634062 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0462149958052 0.151304729494 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.014961524989 0.056905535591 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.97 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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