Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together Do you agree or disagree

Some people argue that one of the best way to make people together from countries and generations age is music. I totally agree with the idea that music plays a significant role in improving the relationship of human beings.
On the one hand, music has a great influence on many aspects of life. Firstly, music became a large industry which brings huge benefits to economy. For example, a large part of Korea’s economy is based on K-pop industry which made billions dollars each year for this country. Secondly, music has effective impacts on the knowledge of us. In fact, a song called “What I have done” of a famous rock band helped people to understand more about the awareness of protecting environment. Finally, it is also an effective tool to teach children about morale or motivation for better lifestyle.
On the other hand, music also has an important role in decreasing the generation gap among people. The first reason is there are many kinds of song which people can hear with other ages. Songs which are written by great musical such as Bach, Mozart or Beethoven could be heard by everyone. Another reason is some music producers is trying to make up songs for more generations could hear. In fact, in karaoke bars, a family with children and grandparents can choose and sing a song together.
In conclusion, I believe that music can not completely eliminate the distance between people but it is still a significant way of bringing people of different cultures and age together.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1248.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.875 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61586953755 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5859375 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 398.7 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.7892772217 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.1428571429 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2857142857 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.42857142857 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272156385904 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893675633748 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114714406806 0.0667982634062 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210822152858 0.151304729494 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129203427169 0.056905535591 227% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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