Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Music- is a type of art that is created through the elements of melody. Nowadays, many people consider that music is the solution to many conflicts which helps to assemble people together. I strongly agree with this statement and believe that the music can change the world.
To commence with, music-is an instrument by which we can control the people and bring them together. However, it depends on genre of the music. If aggressive and terrifying sound with inadequate context is turned on, people would try to avoid you. Therefore, it is crucial to turn on only positive music with pleasant sound in order to assemble people and get their worthwhile attention. Moreover, our ancestors and grandparents used music for the purpose of making a peace with other people. When people had a conflict, they usually switched on Beethoven’s or Mozart’s music and after that tension between them always decreased. Hence, it is clear that the music is a thing by which we can not only satisfy ourselves, but also make a peace between people.
It is important to highlight that music does not depend on nationality and age of people. Artists and musicians like Bob Marley, Michael Jackson and their songs are well known to entire world because they bring people together. You can ask any person, in any country, in any age about the songs of these artists and everyone would answer that they are the most peaceful and best ones. Furthermore, it was proved by scientists that when you listen to your favorite music, organism secretes hormones of endorphins and serotonin. After that, your psychological condition changes into the positive sight, and your relation to other people became more optimistic and kind. Consequently, it would be much easier to assemble people together in a peaceful atmosphere.
I I believe that music is unique in its capacity to create shared experiences between people, irrespective of culture and age.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1609.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.028125 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65222305046 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56875 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.4753430472 49.4020404114 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.6470588235 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8235294118 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52941176471 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276150127949 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0896860549226 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0423856339155 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164810034415 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440317492748 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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