Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people in different cultures and ages together.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Nowadays, many employees show an ever-rising interest in running their own business, hoping for gaining a conspicuous success in their careers. however, there have been some reasons behind this notion, and inevitably a few drawbacks associated with it.
First and foremost, the most explicit motive for why workers, whether full-time or part-time, aspire to be autonomous in their jobs is the issue of financial expectation. In Iran, for instance, the sizeable proportion of majority working for both private and governmental organizations have had a bare and miserable existence, making them promote this idea that if they had initiated their trade, they would have reaped a remarkably higher income than employment. Furthermore, another cause of this, which a huge influx of people showed interest in their jobs, would perhaps be the matter of mundane lifestyle. Even though in many firms they should work for whole daylight, they hardly observe any challenge in not only their skills but also their work environment and places, making them cherish their professional ambitions.
In the matter of shortcomings, the balance of work and life would be the prime concern among entrepreneurs. When they begin their professional occupations, the dogged perseverance and industriousness are the virtues that they should possibly take into account, ensuring their salary and products to be sold, thus it will undeniably erode their personal life since spending less time for family and personal demands. Moreover, health is another utmost important issue that is widely debated. Not only does it solely hurt health but it also deteriorates the conditions as well as their vocational performance as it damages their health if they adopt such a hectic lifestyle in the long run.
In conclusion, self-employment has captured people’s attention owing to the higher level of remuneration package and a more active lifestyle. however, there will be several negative aspects such as the work-life balance and endangered health for those who envisage their future prospects as entrepreneurship.
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- Some people feel that public money should not be spent on cultural amenities such as museums theatres and art festivals How important do you think these things are to society as a whole Are there any areas which are more important for the government to fu 44
- Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to wor for company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed? 81
- Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people in different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? 11
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 145, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...a conspicuous success in their careers. however, there have been some reasons behind th...
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Line 7, column 148, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...on package and a more active lifestyle. however, there will be several negative aspects...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50621118012 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99388063311 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627329192547 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.8558009475 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.75 106.682146367 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8333333333 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.83333333333 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0409120299067 0.244688304435 17% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0206623648367 0.084324248473 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0337459600219 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0319201351281 0.151304729494 21% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0203732503808 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.03 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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