Some people say that schools should concentrate on teaching students academic subjects that will be useful for their future careers. Other people say that subjects such as music and sports are also necessary. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.
Some people believe that school should remove sport and music so that students can focus on academic subjects such as Math or English, which support their careers in future. While it is true that core subjects are important, I do not believe that completely concentrating on teaching academic fields is an optimum choice due to securing employment and enhancing potential talents by studying artistic and athletic subjects.
On the one hand, academic subjects are paramount to students’ future profession. It could be said that the foremost objective of people who attend school is to get a financially viable career when they finish. When students give full attention to only one subjects, the learners can get high academic knowledge in their own fields and easy to get a good job with attractive salary. Moreover, concentrating on one important subject enhance students’ efficient of learning. Due to it, students do not feel bored and stress when have to study the subjects they do not keen on learning.
On the other hand, teaching athletic and artistic fields allow young talents to be discovered as well as indirectly make candidates more employable. Subjects such as music and sport provide essential skills which necessary for future career. Nowadays, recruiters tend to favor candidates majoring in arts because they are more creative and better at collaborative skill, and it is the key to any company’s success. Furthermore, some students do not know that they have aptitude of this field. Therefore, teaching athletic and artistic subjects helps school as well as the youth to discover their potential, and it can be an opportunity for students to success and find a good job in the future.
In conclusion, in spite of the benefits of learning academic subjects, I still believe that learners ought to study all the subjects to achieve their full potential and get a good job in the field that they have aptitude.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...or English, which support their careers in future. While it is true that core subjects ar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in spite of, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1621.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11356466877 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77751608949 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514195583596 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9167668864 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.692307692 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3846153846 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4615384615 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317034469095 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122458588398 0.084324248473 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0874506547966 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188813633158 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0729718995829 0.056905535591 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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