Over the years, great importance has been placed on the factors that can possibly influence children since everyone wants theirs to be positively affected. Some persons believe that what a child is exposed to visually can have an effect on his or her behavior, while others have a more nuclear view, pointing directly to the amount of time spent on television as the most influential on the behavior of children. I completely agree that television influences children the most, although I am not oblivious to the fact that what children watch in general can also influence them.
Children have less defensive wall when it comes to what influences them and as such are easily influenced by what they watch. What is being viewed has a tremendous effect on whomever is the viewer, how much more children. During childhood, children are trying to discover themselves, making them copy whatever they see, be it from their parents, siblings, teachers or even from their peers. That is why a son of an architect is likely to know drawing because he must have tried copying the father's art when growing up. A child raised in a violent environment is more likely to become violent owing to the violent scenes experienced. With this in mind, parents try to be in control of what there children see so that their young ones can be influenced more positively.
Others have a more specific opinion, opting for the amount of time spent on television as the most determining factor when it comes to what influences children's behavior. If a child spends more time watching a particular celebrity, there is every likelihood that the child will want to act like the star. I remember when I was watching wrestling as a child, I always wanted to display attributes connected to the wrestler I love most; that should be the Undertaker, from his movement to how he rotates his eyes and then his calm body expression. Few times, I and my twin brother engaged in wrestling just to see how we will perform; a performance based on what was watched.
For a certainty, the amount of time spent on television influences children the most; however what young ones are exposed visually can affect them to a reasonable degree.
- The topic is taken from Cambridge book of IELTS 9 writing task 1 test 3 The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feat 67
- the pie chart show the electricity generated in Germany and france from all sources and renewables in the year 2009 summarize the information by selecting and reporting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 67
- The given graph shows the consumption of fast food in the UK per week from 1970 to 1990 67
- the bar chart shows scores of 3 teams a b nd c over four different seasons summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons were relevant
- the bar chart shows scores of 3 teams a b nd c over four different seasons summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons were relevant 90
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 70, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'can'.
Suggestion: can
...nce has been placed on the factors that can possibly influence children since everyone wants...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, then, while, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1826.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 378.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83068783069 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66503897582 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531746031746 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 559.8 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.832007688 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.428571429 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.64285714286 7.06120827912 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320823982861 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119227197209 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853581843679 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210907747496 0.151304729494 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546011415612 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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