Some people say that youngsters should take part time job while study in University. Do you agree or disagree?
Many of people have some opini about the young girl and boy must have a job during study in their university. I totally agree about this essay and i think if they have a job it can be an individual independent, because they do not need to get money from their parents.
First of all, nowadays some people choose to work while study because they have leisure time that can be productive days, and it can increase the financial and help all of the needy of youngsters. Therefore, all of the best things what to do, it not disturb their study. Although, this way not easy for several individuals. For instance, we can do a task by online, and more easier than work from office, it can spend a lot of time and energy.
Secondly, we must to try some of activities that unusual for us, if usually we just to led money from our parents, we can got that and can buy everything that necessary for us. despite, rarely young people to think like that. And if we have money we can achieve a dreams that yet come true. For example, a lady choose to work form home to avoid poor and can watch some of selebrities that their love on the spot, like a concert.
In conclusion, we must have a work to be a young rich because we have a lot of needy to complete their life
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 148, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...y. I totally agree about this essay and i think if they have a job it can be an i...
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Line 2, column 166, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... it can increase the financial and help all of the needy of youngsters. Therefore, all of ...
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Line 2, column 209, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... of the needy of youngsters. Therefore, all of the best things what to do, it not disturb ...
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Line 2, column 251, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'disturbs'?
Suggestion: disturbs
...l of the best things what to do, it not disturb their study. Although, this way not eas...
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Line 2, column 371, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...stance, we can do a task by online, and more easier than work from office, it can spend a l...
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Line 3, column 14, Rule ID: MUST_HAVE_TO[1]
Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
... lot of time and energy. Secondly, we must to try some of activities that unusual for...
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Line 3, column 26, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the activities') or simply say ''some activities''.
Suggestion: some of the activities; some activities
... and energy. Secondly, we must to try some of activities that unusual for us, if usually we just...
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Line 3, column 123, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'get'
Suggestion: get
...t to led money from our parents, we can got that and can buy everything that necess...
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Line 3, column 263, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a dream' or simply 'dreams'?
Suggestion: a dream; dreams
...at. And if we have money we can achieve a dreams that yet come true. For example, a lady...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1016.0 1615.20841683 63% => OK
No of words: 240.0 315.596192385 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.23333333333 5.12529762239 83% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93597934253 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30179579652 2.80592935109 82% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 176.041082164 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520833333333 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 329.4 506.74238477 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1404625261 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3636363636 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8181818182 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3636363636 7.06120827912 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121175430436 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0506348751609 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0468106870806 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0763292303937 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0589750323897 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 13.0946893788 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 50.2224549098 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.25 12.4159519038 58% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 78.4519038076 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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