Some people store personal and private information online including banking contacts and addresses Is it a positive or negative trend

Thanks to technological advances, storing confidential information on the Internet has been on the rise for years. I believe this development is positive considering its benefits to people.
On the other hand, the primary drawback this trend induces is that information can be stolen by hackers. It is not uncommon these days many people click on links, covered with sexual images, on social networking sites like Facebook by providing their private information, including passwords. As a result, the hackers can use the data to commit crimes like applying for a loan without the victims’ awareness.
On the other hand, I believe the drawback mentioned above is outweighed by the benefits of this development. Firstly, it is unnecessary for people to invariably have the burdens of paperwork and document handling, instead, they tend to carry their smartphones or laptops to conveniently access the information stored online. Secondly, storing confidential data on the Internet offers greater safety methods. This happens because they are guaranteed by the most advanced security systems on Earth that have been devised and developed by ultimate software companies like Google. Therefore, hackers have trouble passing numerous tough tasks to stole the information online without permission.
In conclusion, I reaffirm that despite the aforementioned disadvantage, storing private data on the Internet is positive overall considering its benefits to people nowadays.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 174, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...dering its benefits to people nowadays.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, second, secondly, so, therefore, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1250.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 221.0 315.596192385 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.65610859729 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02745705204 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 176.041082164 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.615384615385 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 396.0 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7592965329 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.636363636 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0909090909 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.54545454545 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185417699175 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633840013557 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471157294662 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115272363809 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0237038543186 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.55 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.42 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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