Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Obesity is one of the growing concerns among children in todays world due to their preference of junk food over healthy, nutritious food. But, this doesn't mean that government is to be blamed for this arising situation and this essay will discuss the same.
Overall, children becoming obese is not sudden change and it can be controlled by monitoring the diet. Government cannot keep a check on every child's intake and it is responsibility of their parents to teach them the importance of healthy food. Certain people opine that government should impose restrictions upon the restaurants and companies from selling unhealthy food or guidelines so that the nutritive value of food is maintained. However, even if the both parties agree to these terms it is necessary for the parents to ensure that their child eats within limit and doesn't develop a habit of consuming excess leading to obesity. For example, if a pupils both parents are working, he would be only left with option to eat processed food at home or canteen if their parents have not cooked anything before leaving for the job. In such cases, parents should create awareness in child regarding the ill-effects of excess consumption.
Although, there might be certain steps through which government could increase awareness about this problem. Nevertheless, organizations do conduct regular checks on manufacturing factories to check whether the products are adhered to their nutritional guidelines, it is necessary for them to provide correct information about those products through advertisement. Initiative should be taken in conjunction with Non government organizations to setup regular camps and provide information to people regarding the the obesity and its effects in future.
In conclusion, there are various methods by which government could lend a helping hand in creating awareness about obesity but blaming them completely is not acceptable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, nevertheless, regarding, so, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38079470199 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8782530464 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58940397351 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.8211347403 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.416666667 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1666666667 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.08333333333 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138280890414 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0494275392795 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0187589593628 0.0667982634062 28% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0779437387813 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0226549615882 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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