Some people think money is the best gift to give to youngsters, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Opinions differ as to whether using money as a gift to young people is the best idea. I believe it is not the best option.
It is understandable why some individuals think that money is the perfect gift to youngsters. One reason is that most nowadays adolescents tend to be more financial demanded for personal needs and neglect their study. Giving money, therefore, is a fair trade to convince the young concentrating on their formal education, which could result in the improvement of academic performance. Another reason is unlike other gifts which adults have to pick up from shops, putting money in an envelope consumes almost no time. Thus, it is an easier option for those who are tight with their schedules, yet do not wish to miss out their children’s important events.
Having said that, money should not be overused due to several negative impacts on young people. One reason to support my standpoint on this matter is that bad habits amongst children could be formed when parents frequently hand out money to reward or celebrate their kids’ results at school or birthdays. Among various bad effects, perhaps the most dangerous one could be the perpetual relying on receiving money to work. Without money, these youngsters are unlikely to study willingly. Furthermore, other types of gifts such as a hand-made origami flower or a traveling trip would strengthen the family bonds as well as deliver meaningful messages to the kids.
In conclusion, I side with those who think gifting money to young individuals could be somewhat detrimental. However, either what types of gifts parents choose to surprise their children, the sole purpose is still bringing joy to young ones.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 17, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
Opinions differ as to whether using money as a gift to young people i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, as to, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1424.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08571428571 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73436184399 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635714285714 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.215151157 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.714285714 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64285714286 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195424704738 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743596895712 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0725887261603 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132334690759 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603487683506 0.056905535591 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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