Some people think that outdoor activities are more beneficial for children's development than playing computer games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, where the world is developing with a rocket-like speed, it will not be a strange thing to see the children, from an infant to a teenager, with smartphones, computers, or any other electronic devices. As a result, most of the children end up spending their time by only playing computer games. To solve this, playing outside in leisure comes to the point. Therefore, I will discuss by agreeing that outdoor activities are more effective for children.
To initiate, lack of backyard or spaces for modern living will be the main reason for introducing virtual games, instead of physical sports. Parents are worried about their kids' safety in sophisticated cities, so that they won't let them go outside and play with friends. Subsequently, artificial games overwhelm youth of today. Therefore, it gradually ruins their health and paves the way for eye-related, back-related, and more problems. To tackle this problem, it is vital to keep in touch with mother nature. Exposing ourselves to green trees, blue lakes, and lying down on the grass, is extremely pleasant and can help us improve with our eyesight and vitamin-D, essential for healthy body and peace of mind. Moreover, we can expand our social network while visiting such places, as we will meet new friends and neighbors. Being delighted with nature and people who we love is obviously better than being isolated with electrical products. On the other hand, a group of advocates may say that being in touch with modern technologies can raise the child into a scientist or a game developer in the future. Nevertheless, a massive number of people, including me, are against with this point of view. It would be no use to put all our efforts into one only thing, and become weaker than before. All of us are not born for this, hence, rustic liveliness supremely plays a role in our lives.
To conclude, we need to balance our screen time with natural actions. Life is short and we ought to utilize our time with peace, love, and calmness to enjoy the life at its best.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1218, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...with this point of view. It would be no use to put all our efforts into one only th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, while, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1691.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 347.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87319884726 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63111918462 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.64265129683 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1380740418 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.9444444444 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2777777778 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11111111111 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150766926364 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0496707389734 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0622797314111 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10227744831 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0839368628705 0.056905535591 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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