Some people think painting and drawings are as important as other subjects, they should be compulsory in high school education. What do you think?
This debate reminds me a story, a group of Chinese students visited America, during the process of communication activity, American students invited Chinese peers to play musical instrument together, yet, what a pity is that almost nobody is well-versed in art performance .Virtually, many educators and parents have been pondering, for years, the connotation of perfect education. As I see it, only imparting career-oriented knowledge leaves much to be desired, therefore, it is of necessity to include painting and drawings as compulsory part of high school curriculum.
I first turn to the chief aim of education to justify my viewpoint. An ideal education should entail helping youngsters realize comprehensive development and cultivating their manifold talents. Academic education is important, however, art-related courses are equally indispensable because the popularity of art courses could, to large extent, mould one’s temperament, enhance one’s art accomplishment, instill confidence into one’s heart. Also, a number of students are now over-burdened with exam-oriented and exercise-stuffed education, they, sometimes, feel fed up with school life, thereby, studying art course can be considered as an effective stress-reducer, which helps students to brave academic challenges energetically. Last, knowledge is not a burden, a man of many parts should never confine himself to job-related knowledge. Instead, one is expected to become more versatile via developing various capabilities.
Some others might take a skeptical attitude towards my stand. Those who believe that it is probably a hasty decision to introduce pairings or drawings to the curriculum of school education might argue that this practice is more likely to interfere with students' study of main courses and occupy a lot of precious time. Meanwhile, some people might contend that art-related courses bear little relevance to one’s future job-seeking. What I want to refute, however, is that this utilitarian mentality will inevitably hinder one’s all-round development and deprive students of enjoyment brought about by art learning.
To conclude, the introduction of art-related courses into high school education enjoys glaring merits to tap the students' many capabilities, hence, I re-affirm my conviction that it is advisable and feasible to encourage those who in the formative years to acquire paintings and drawings.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, so, still, therefore, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.3376753507 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2091.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.85714285714 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26919198319 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641456582633 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 97.7226482261 49.4020404114 198% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.846153846 106.682146367 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4615384615 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.07692307692 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132194649207 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0466242590857 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436623543846 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0816678231015 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0261216466278 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.9 13.0946893788 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 18.69 50.2224549098 37% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.4 11.3001002004 154% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.0 12.4159519038 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.55 8.58950901804 123% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 78.4519038076 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 9.78957915832 215% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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