In a world full of races, everone tries to go forward and achieve success. Weather to motivate competition in children or teach them to unite is a disputable issues among all. In my opinion, I agree that children must be fostered to acieve aim and chase success in life but without hurting feelings of others. At the same time, it is important to learn to value unity and humanity at very young age in order to grow as a mature adult in future.
Children feels a need to achivehigh grade in their study when sense of competition is encouraged. Not only in study, the realiztion to acheive higher than others grants them to be valueable and useful in this mordern corporate world where everyone is trying to win over competitor; a feeling of humanity and collaboration would nolonger serve them oppourtunity and job when they get older. A feeling to win over a competition is also helful to set right framework in mind to look over life's challenges and oppourtunity otherwise children's could twists their own wheel and disempower themselves in real world. consequently, this encourge them to walk towards path of success and achieve aim. For instance; a hriring manager hires those candidate with best outcome than those with less achievement.
However, in order to be a true leader in real world, one needs to have a sense of corporation. A child while growing with a feeling of competition builds ego when adult. It is obvius that one person's success results failure in others which is a root of low self esteem for failure. In addition to this, a strong sense to win one another might let them forget humanity and even more, people tend to play political game wherever they feel to get benefited over others. Neverthless, it is always necessary to unite and work in a team with collaboration and coropration to run company and complete targeted project smoothly. On the other hand, one cannot move forward without a sense to achive something and win over competition. Thus, one child should be taught to be competitive but not overlooking the side of humanity and unity.
To sum up, the sense of competition will motivate them to achieve aim in life but in order to be more useful and valueable adult one should learn humanity and importance of unity in life. I think, a feeling to achive more than others does benefit a lot than having cooperation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 159, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'issue'?
Suggestion: issue
... or teach them to unite is a disputable issues among all. In my opinion, I agree that ...
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Line 1, column 435, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... age in order to grow as a mature adult in future. Children feels a need to achivehigh...
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Line 3, column 546, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'twist'
Suggestion: twist
... oppourtunity otherwise childrens could twists their own wheel and disempower themselv...
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Line 3, column 610, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Consequently
...nd disempower themselves in real world. consequently, this encourge them to walk towards pat...
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Line 3, column 730, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this candidate' or 'those candidates'?
Suggestion: this candidate; those candidates
.... For instance; a hriring manager hires those candidate with best outcome than those with less ...
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Line 3, column 746, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the best'.
Suggestion: with the best
...a hriring manager hires those candidate with best outcome than those with less achievemen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, look, so, thus, while, for instance, i think, in addition, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 10.4138276553 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 41.998997996 176% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1952.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 409.0 315.596192385 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77261613692 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70562395796 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 176.041082164 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537897310513 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0081839258 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.444444444 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7222222222 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.77777777778 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190759468041 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061320725239 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504000680781 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125177212218 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338133727399 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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