Some people think that young people should be required to do unpaid work helping people in the community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?
Volunteering can be seen as a crucial segment of school curriculum
because it brings about many benefits. Obviously, the majority of people
suppose that high school students should be forced to participate in unpaid
community service and I partly approve of the above idea because of many
rational reasons.
There are various justified reasons why I believe that unpaid
community service should be obligatory. Undoubtedly, volunteering teaches
students to empathize with strangers, not to be so indifferent to them when
they need people’s help. Furthermore, unpaid community service allows
students to have many opportunities to gain some soft skills such as
communication or team work since they have chances to work and cooperate
with a large number of people in society and these characteristics have a
significant influence on their studies and also decide their future careers
because employers usually highly value people making great contribution to
society.
Contrary to these advantages mentioned above, there are still some
drawbacks of this issue. Obviously, high school students spend most of their
time on their studies because high school curriculum is overwhelmed by
difficult subjects such as Math, Chemistry, Biology...and they can study these
subjects within a limited period of time... If unpaid community service is
mandatory, students can not balance their time and they will face challenges
in the academic area and sometimes, they may fail in some important exams
and this negatively affect their results .
In conclusion, everything has both benefits and drawbacks and unpaid
community service is not an exception. However, I suppose that the
advantages absolutely outweighs the disadvantages because volunteering can
shape children as socially responsible citizens and their all-round
development.
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Suggestion: many; numerous
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...and this negatively affect their results . In conclusion, everything has both be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, i suppose, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1601.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.84306569343 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00812343689 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583941605839 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.9723671981 49.4020404114 196% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.1 106.682146367 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 25.0 4.38176352705 571% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215303942579 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0913156089896 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059363886032 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0591599910531 0.151304729494 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546727498471 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 13.0946893788 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.15 50.2224549098 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.89 12.4159519038 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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