Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that having these people to give a talk to school students is the best way to tell them about the dangers of committing a crime. Do you agree or disagree?
In this day and age, educating children on the severe consequence of committing a crime has long been a contentious issue. There is a common belief that talks given by people who used to undergo imprisonment should be held at school to keep students informed of crimes and its threats. While it is undeniable that this practice could be beneficial to some extent, I would contend that there are several better methods to educate children about the dangers when a crime is carried out.
Firstly, it is understandable why some people argue that having reformed criminals talking about the hazards associated with crime could bring out advantages. The most obvious benefit is that students can draw lessons from people who truly understand crime and prison. Those who used to be imposed a prison sentence have likely gathered knowledge not only about the dangers of crime for its victims, but also the threats to the offenders themselves. To explain, criminals are those who experienced a long process of incarceration and rehabilitation , their life-stories are definitely a great source of knowledge and experience of both what they lost and how remorseful they feel.
Notwithstanding the benefits of the aforementioned method, I’m convinced that there are better approaches to teach children about the adverse impacts of taking part in illegal activities. Firstly, schools and educators should take into account a subject called criminology and integrate it into the student’s regular curriculum. This subject, by contrast to life-stories of former convicts which could be deemed as anecdotal evidence , tends to be more reliable. With this method, children can be equipped with all necessary knowledge about crime through the lens of science and therefore have a holistic view on this issue. Alternatively, showing films which carry lives of people behind the bars and their difficulty in jails is also another viable measure. Because films can offer vivid images, it becomes more attractive and therefore more effective in informing students of the harsh reality of life during incarceration.
In conclusion, even though talks given by ex-offenders may be a great source of harsh lives and knowledge about crimes, I am still of the opinion that there are several more upbeat and effective ways to help students have a better approach to this issue, such as the introduction of criminology as a subject at schools.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, so, still, therefore, while, in conclusion, such as, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2041.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 388.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26030927835 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90348925185 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55412371134 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.2606882832 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.785714286 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7142857143 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24061484432 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0842726138439 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642969715866 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149609218595 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.06658020419 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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