Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that having these people to give a talk to school students is the best way to tell them about dangers of committing a crime. Do you agree or disagree?
It is true that ex-criminals can help younger adults understand about dangers of crime because some people has become good residents later on. While some people consider that this is the most effective way to educate adolescents, I would argue that there are better methods to teach them.
On the one hand, there are some reasons why teenagers should accept advices from ex-prisoners to avoid dangers of committing crimes. Firstly, due to spending more time in prison, ex-offenders who have real-life experience to share about the difficulties that they had to face. For example, young adults could be known more about harsh prison conditions and how offenders are really treated in prisons. As a result, teenagers could be aware of the negative effects of committing crimes. Additionally, many employers are likely to be afraid of people who are used to be an offender, and this makes it more difficult for them to find a stable job. Therefore, they are able to commit crimes again such as stealing to meet their basic needs. If young adults are passed these problems from ex-criminals, they would not engage illegal acts.
On the other hand, I would argue that there are more influential ways to help younger citizens deepen their knowledge about dangers of crime. The first solution is that watching movies about crime and punishment allows teenagers to experience dangers of committing crimes. For instance, they could see the quality of food that criminals are distributed or feel that it is really a waste of life time in prison instead of using this time for better aims. As a consequence, young adults are likely to learn more about criminal life. Furthermore, being educated by teachers and parents through their different stories, adolescents could enhance their knowledge about the tremendous results that they have to meet if they become a criminal. For instance, in the past my father told me about his friend who stole a car. As a result of this action, he could not completely find a job after being released.
In conclusion, while it is necessary to train adolescents from hands-on experience of ex-offenders, I believe that several more effective solutions should be applied.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 391, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...ed or feel that it is really a waste of life time in prison instead of using this time fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, really, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1843.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 363.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07713498623 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68328326996 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542699724518 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.2199113286 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.411764706 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3529411765 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.47058823529 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218960366088 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.070856490129 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627531326074 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141264119614 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103835270518 0.056905535591 182% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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