Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, people believe that prisoners tend to become better inhabitants after jail time, and it is said that these committed citizens will be the right people to express to young people about the dangerous crime. In my viewpoint, I definitely agree with that statement.
Schools often use some alternative methods which may have less effective in educating learners. Firstly, teachers usually talk to their pupils about the dark side of criminals through films or news. Therefore, teenagers will suspect the accuracy of given information because these films sometimes are made up and do not base on real situations. Secondly, police officers can talk exactly to adolescents about criminal cases such as drugs additive, but they often lack experience of these committing. For example, the officers can not share with teenagers the status of the temptation of heroin.
I presume that using re-formed citizens have two advantages. On the one hand, young people tend to believe ex-offenders who have real experience about criminals. For instance, these ex-prisoners can describe how hard feeling of the additive of morphine and how they have to struggle when they can not find this substance. On the other hand, they can share with teenagers about the difficult time when they were in jail to warn the listeners. Besides, when they commit a crime and go to prison, their families also are affected by investigating from police officers and the discrimination of society.
In conclusion, I totally agree that ex-prisoners tend to be better citizens, and they are a good example for teenagers about committing crimes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1364.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26640926641 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78471808632 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594594594595 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.649666855 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.923076923 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9230769231 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.1538461538 7.06120827912 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29489347692 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0937108858728 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702484894682 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185813325215 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631258922661 0.056905535591 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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