Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The quality of life has been improved significantly throughout the time, especially at present, the novel technology has enabled the governments to enhance the status of dwellers. Hence, some people propose that laborers should work more than the initial retirement age since they are enjoying a longer life span. From the vantage point, there are both pros and cons in the given opinion, which will be dissected with specific rationales in the essay below.
On the one hand, encouraging elderly to be involved in work brings numerous advantages to themselves as well as the country. According to recent research, there is an escalating number of elderlies suffering from anxiety and depression because they are left alone in the house with no relatives or kids around them. Therefore, working will help them re-connect with humanity and socialize with colleagues, which undoubtedly improves the overall welfare. In terms of the nation, more workers means more opportunities to develop in such fields as economy, medicine or culture etc... It also results in the diversity of the labour force together with the enhancement of the GDP of their country.
On the other hand, raising the retirement age may cause several controversials due to some reasons. It can be seen that an average person has to spend more than a half of their life span on pursuing work. Implementing this policy will not only make more people engaged in endless nine-to-five rat races but also shorten the time needed to strengthen the family bond. Besides, working at old age is not a really good choice with companies, since their productivity is quite lower than the young co-workers and small or medium companies have an intention of cutting down on the number of employees to increase the outcomes. Thus, the disadvantages have outstripped the aforementioned merits with reasonable explanations.
In conclusion, while both dwellers and the nation are the beneficiaries due to some extent, it is conspicuous that this policy still has its own downsides regarding the average working time and other issues. Thus, governments should make this policy optional to meet the requirements of working over the retirement age of a certain number of people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, hence, if, may, really, regarding, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1869.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 360.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19166666667 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84702573848 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586111111111 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8065415562 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.6 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202408265713 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0619560890058 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563316582947 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123502324231 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046873693936 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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