As the world steers towards efficiency, equality is often disregarded, causing the wealth gap to continue to widen. While some people are living in mansions, enjoying extravagant lifestyles, others are lying on the street, locked in poverty. The advocation for affluent people to lend their hands to poor people is growing increasingly popular, and I will offer what I believe the rich should do.
At first glance, helping others seems far down the list of importance for wealthy businessmen; their lives are focused on scenting and grasping new profiting opportunities. After all, in most countries, there are already laws in place to redistribute income. For example, some governments implement progressive taxation and use some of the tax revenue for benefit payments. Moreover, selfishness and greediness can all be seen as human nature, so why would someone who finally found success in their business want to share the fortune? They seem to have no incentive to do so.
However, history teaches us lessons. In the British Edwardian era, there was an intangible wall separating the aristocracy and middle class from the working class. Those capitalists made more money than they could spend in a lifetime, no matter how lavishly they squandered the pounds on expensive ports, or heavy, weighty cars. They greedily reached for more, tucking them deep into the pockets of their tailcoats, refusing to help those poor-stricken. At that time, they seemed to be winners. Eventually, along with other factors, extreme capitalism and selfishness, pursuing wealth with no compassion, brought the great destruction. The European economy plunged after the first shots of World War One, and no one benefited from it.
For rich people, preserving equality through helping others is essential because alleviating poverty can benefit themselves. Firstly, equality can stabilize society, ceasing civil unrests and turbulences that would shatter the economy. Secondly, with fewer people locked in absolute poverty, having negligible purchasing power, the whole society could develop more, so the collective wealth would increase. Lastly, if wealthy people save all their money for themselves, they can only satisfy their materialistic needs, but not earn any respect or psychological fulfillment. People would look at them in contempt; their inherent morality and sympathy would condemn them.
To conclude, rich people should focus on using their power, influence and wealth to help others, to spread love and compassion. Donating money to charities can be a great way to do so.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, after all, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2179.0 1615.20841683 135% => OK
No of words: 400.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4475 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78781276272 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 176.041082164 147% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6475 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9119502081 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0454545455 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1818181818 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36363636364 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135288411114 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0383750612716 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0343367111786 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0817382165658 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309910577577 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.03 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 78.4519038076 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.