successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important profeffsions. some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair
Sports have been part of our daily life since the early ages, it's becoming a business and people are getting more and more money from it especially those at the top,even better than other fields . Although, sports professionals and sports lovers find it is worthy while the opposite may not.
There are numerous reason why sports stars are paid huge salaries and their rewards are justified. First, Only the talented players out there get to become succesful for their hardwork and dedication. Therefore, the wages paid to those sportmen are reasonable and higher than most people, which will motivate them to continue on their path. Second, in order to make a living for their family in the future because of their short career, sport players have to withstand constant intense pressure such as competition, media, short career. These factors completely justify the massive earnings.
On the other hand, there are many others essential proffesions think their pay is unfair, mostly those with higher education. First, they have contributed their life to learning and to society, serving the community. In fact, it takes as much responibility and hardwork as playing sports, even much more, So at least they deserve to be paid equally as those athletes. Second, what appears to be more realistic is solving the world's problems, which requires more finance to attract teacher, doctor, scientist and the attention of the media. For example, climate change, hunger, education should be on top of the list since it does and will affect all living creatures and future generations on earth.
In conclusion, the amount of money sports proffesions make is acceptable but focusing on sports will only do more harm than good. We should value others important professtions at the same time for the greater good.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, while, at least, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1511.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12203389831 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50891170942 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610169491525 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5118006335 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.928571429 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0714285714 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.85714285714 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199638740505 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0624615825891 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639370873957 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128872775311 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680467423099 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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