t is a good idea for people to continue working in an old age, if it is possible for them to do so. Do you agree or disagree?
There is a widely held belief that individuals should continue to dedicate themselves to society when they are in old age. From my perspective, I agree that people can work longer past the retirement age if they are capable of pursuing their careers.
To begin with, the idea that people should stop working in their old age is mainly based on the assumption that their feeble health does not allow them to continue working. Therefore, dealing with a heavy workload everyday can negatively affect both physical and mental health. Nonetheless, this line of reasoning is scientifically groundless as working in old age is necessary to improve their health condition. Keeping the elderly employed and active is vital to maintain their well-being instead of them having a sedentary lifestyle at home. In addition, they also have an opportunity to socialize and feel a sense of purpose through communication with colleagues. Furthermore, because of long time dedication, they gain experience in the workplace and have financial independence so they can easily solve problems and create happiness in life.
Another commonly cited argument is that the elderly deserve to retire and receive social welfare because they have put skills and knowledge to the best use for society in their working age. However, this fails to take into consideration their willingness to stay employed. Firstly, a lot of old people have a burning desire and still have a strong passion for their jobs so they may contribute their labor to national and social development. Another reason is that they do not want themselves to become a burden to family and society. For instance, if they decided to stay at home, the financial burden would be placed on younger members of the family and they might have difficulty covering the bills.
To wrap up, although the elderly can stop working in the retirement age or continuing to work also brings advantages to society and themselves. From my point of view, the governments and companies need to take their wishes into account as soon as possible.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 214, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...herefore, dealing with a heavy workload everyday can negatively affect both physical and...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, still, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1727.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07941176471 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7621060993 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564705882353 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.560453454 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.133333333 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.26666666667 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213995823992 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0689913497202 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538754997735 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127856757813 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265996419903 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 214, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...herefore, dealing with a heavy workload everyday can negatively affect both physical and...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, still, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1727.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07941176471 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7621060993 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564705882353 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.560453454 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.133333333 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.26666666667 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213995823992 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0689913497202 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538754997735 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127856757813 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265996419903 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.