Task 2: During holidays or weekends, young people spend less time on outdoor activities in the natural environment, such as hiking and mountain climbing. Why? What can be done to encourage them to go out?
In the contemporary era, it is becoming increasingly common for youngsters to spend their leisure time on outdoor activities such as trekking or hiking during. In my personal view, there are many possible causes of this phenomenon and several measures to provoke them do the opposite.
Firstly, the fact that teenagers tend to engage less in outdoor hobbies may come from numerous reasons. The first worth-mentioning cause perhaps is that they are using the Internet excessively, which takes up the most of their free time. Technological advancement has allowed young people to interact with their friends or play video games just by using their smartphones or computers, which can become addictive and time-consuming if there are no restrictions towards it. For instance, many studies have found that adoslescents spend 5-6 hours per day to use social media and this rate is continually rising each year. Furthermore, many environmental problems are occuring, such as air pollution, causing young people to suppose that the outdoor environment is toxic and they will be better off staying at home. All the mentioned factors can result in a sedentary lifestyle within young individuals community.
On the other hand, the solutions to this problem is not far-fetched. One plausible method is that parents can limit the screen time of their children, especially in the holidays or the weekends. This will force them to put their phones down and go outside to tạke up sport activities. In addition, many educational centers and universities should host more sport events for young people and raise their awareness about the benefits of spending time outdoors to their health and well-being. In fact, there are a considerable amount of schools have added this activity into their compulsory extracurricular module. Lastly, local businesses and governments should also take action by cleaning the natural air and sponsoring sport competitions in natural environment like moutain climbing and hiking marathons which are aimed at youngsters.
In conlusion, it is understandable that young individuals tend to enjoy indoor hobbies rather than spending time outdoors due to the Internet development and polluted environment. However, I belive there are many solutions to tackle this situation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 525, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'amounts'?
Suggestion: amounts
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, lastly, may, so, well, for instance, in addition, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43697478992 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99089102979 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621848739496 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 594.9 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7660073277 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.3125 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3125 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3125 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235955005206 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0673370658598 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480190422098 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137035739513 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0305635654006 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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