There are several factors that motivate people to stay in the workforce, and money is the most important reason/factor. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Opinions are divided on whether the salary is the most paramount factor that is contributable to humans who have not been shifted to their firms. Personally, I believe that money, albeit somewhat vital, there is a myriad of significant reasons why people remain on their work.
Admittedly, it is an undeniable truth that money plays an indispensable role in human's daily lives. By earning a lucrative income, people can easily support their essential demands such as education, the healthcare system, and entertainment. Some households with many children with their parents get a small amount of money, they are inclined to drop out or famish, which can lead to negative repercussions. Therefore, should companies not pay their staff high salaries, the turnover will be inevitable. To illustrate this point, according to Vnexpress, over a third of employees in Viet Construction Company quit their job due to the severe conditions on-site and mainly because of low salary. Given this, it is understandable why some people advocate that money is the most necessary factor that encourages staff to unchanged their work.
However, I think that apart from money, a countless reasons why to stimulate people to remain in their workplace during the entire time. First, the prime factor is the working environment where staff spends their time each day, giving rise to whether they long to stay or not. To be more specific, if employees work in a room with fresh air without pollutants as well as is equipped with air conditioning or many useful devices, they will want to work for a long run as opposed to somewhere with bad ambiances. Furthermore, satisfaction in the workplace is another crucial factor for workers to stay in. Employees feel the help and empathy of their managers and the friendly environment with their co-workers, facilitating their motivation, productivity, and attachment in their firms.
To conclude, although the significance of money in the remaining workforce, it is my conviction that the working environment and satisfaction are much more important.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 66, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (paramount) must be used with a third-person verb: 'factors'.
Suggestion: factors
...hether the salary is the most paramount factor that is contributable to humans who hav...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, third, well, apart from, i think, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1753.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 333.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26426426426 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96649581066 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585585585586 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4563691758 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.214285714 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7857142857 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144039327248 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590019560765 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051866507888 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0934913674087 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0408239032091 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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