Whether the introduction of mobile phones is beneficial to human being or not is a heated topic recently. While some people are of the belief that this technological tool has assisted modern life in various ways, some argue that this technological breakthrough has more damaging effects on social, medical and technical perspectives. Both of these views will be discussed before my opinion is stated.
On the one hand, I have to concede that increasing reliance on mobile phones can bring about some undesirable impacts. Firstly, these wireless tools can have the result of discouraging real interaction. Young people now show a tendency of immerse themselves in social networks available on mobile phone rather than real-life circle of friends. Consequently, they are no longer forming close and supportive relationships which are the fabric of the society. Society on the whole is becoming gradually disjointed as well. Secondly, people can suffer from mental disorder after incessant usage of this technological device. While in the past, people tended to enjoy outdoor or kinesthetic activites, modern people prefer spending hours on their Ipads or mobile phones. In Japan, many kids encounter mental issues like autism or depression due to excess use of these electronical gadgets. Concentrating on these devices for a long time could also be very harmful to their eyes. Thirdly, it has been reported that some people have been injured due to technical problems associated with the use of their phones. There are cases when the battery of the phones exploded when it was used to make the calls.
On the other hand, it is irrefutable that mobile phone has facilitated long- distance communication, allowing people to connect with one another easily no matter where they are. By using this advanced technology, people from different countries can be brought together through text-messaging or video calls. This was never the case in the past when they rarely had a chance to meet or communicate with anyone outside their immediate circle of community. In addition, there is no doubt that these electronical devices with a wide range of games and smartly-desgined applications have always been a tremendous source of entertainment for modern people after long hard- working day.
In conclusion, no one can deny the fact that handheld phone technology has caused some problems for mankind, its advantages in terms of convenient communication and the supply of amusement of course outweigh the drawbacks.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, of course, on the whole, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2115.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 399.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3007518797 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91430097427 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586466165414 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 506.74238477 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1892720777 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.315789474 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188275131237 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0534067685819 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493958074739 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107510946256 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413351376591 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 78.4519038076 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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