There has been a heated controversy over modern people have become conditional on others or not recently. Both of these views will be discussed before my opinion is stated.
People who advocate the idea that people are more and more relying on others have their own justifications. First, our jobs are much more specialized and we need to work in teams. For instance, office executives need to socialize and get to know people from all different departments and this creates a wider circle in which people's interaction and reliance on each other increase. Moreover, there is no doubt that our living costs are rising at a remarkable level. Therefore, it is understandable that youngsters still rely on their parents to fulfill their basic needs such as education, house, daily commodities and so on until they get a stable job. When they become earning members, they can take care of their parents back then.
On the other hand, it is argued by many people that we are more self- reliant and free from dependency on others. First, modern people depend on machines more than each other. As a matter of fact, the number of who is a computer- literate is increasing, leading to the prevalence of working from home without having interactions with their colleagues. With the availability of computer-based working environment, they can complete their jobs themselves. Many companies have also been computerized and equipped with state- of- the- art facilities. That means the employers are not too dependent on their workforce anymore. In addition, regarding the educational perspective, the introduction of Internet can enable modern children to self- study and explore their field of interests without the needs to ask for assistance from one another. In parallel with the widespread use of the Internet, the proliferation of free educational websites and online informative resources has made the access to information easier than ever before. By only browing those sites, children can enrich their knowledge of any subject easily rather than be upon their tutors. This results in the notion that people can do things self-directly.
In conclusion, although there are some people are of the belief that modern area is the time when we are more reliant on each other, I personally held the opinion that we are more free and independent instead.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 129, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: people
...rom dependency on others. First, modern people people depend on machines more than each other...
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Line 3, column 225, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...s a matter of fact, the number of those who are computer- literate is increasing, leadi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, regarding, so, still, then, therefore, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, as a matter of fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1973.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 385.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12467532468 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82172379009 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 176.041082164 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5670548274 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.842105263 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2631578947 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.68421052632 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330646937466 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11039064118 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.130229978794 0.0667982634062 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242292784861 0.151304729494 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0616757641924 0.056905535591 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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