In the time past, photographers use to give us real images of people and places. Nowadays, it is difficult to trust what they give us.
Is this a negative or positive development.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your experience or knowledge.
In the past era, photographers normally capture and present to us, the original pictures of locations and individuals. However, people argue that nowadays, it is difficult to ascertain the originality of these images. In my opinion, this is a negative development because it can present a false reality to individuals and cause teenagers to develop bad health conditions, striving to have the perfect image.
In the world today, many people find it hard to believe the images photographers present to us, hence, this is a negative development because it can create a sterotype of a perfect image based on false reality. For example, a female person might see an image of a model, with all the perfect body curves that has being edited on the image, hence, this false reality can convince her to opt for a cosmetic surgery even when unnecessary, so as to attain the perfect posture. This attempt can prove fatal and lead to complications, a direct result of a false reality picture seen on newspapers and magazines.
Furthermore, another reason why this development is not a positive one is because this can cause individuals especially teenagers to develop critical health conditions such as bulimia, trying to be the perfect image. Ultimately, this instance can cause them to be more vulnerable to different illnesses because they lack the necessary nutrients and a balanced diet to boost their immune system.
In conclusion, the images seen nowadays are difficult to see as true, thus, I believe this is a bad development because this can lead to a sterotype based on false body images, which could have dire consequences and can make teenagers develop bad health condition in trying to get the best body image they see on magazines, altered by photographers.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 437, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...cosmetic surgery even when unnecessary, so as to attain the perfect posture. This attemp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, however, if, so, thus, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1479.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06506849315 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91831262924 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520547945205 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.3350168157 49.4020404114 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.333333333 106.682146367 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.4444444444 20.7667163134 156% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1111111111 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163680101878 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0773082062113 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407664673276 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1084147727 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0160169261323 0.056905535591 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 13.0946893788 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 50.2224549098 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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