We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help so we should concern ourselves with only our own commusnities and and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.
The ability to help all people in the whole world is really not feasible hence we should look into our own regional areas and nations. I totally agree with this view and my reasons will be clearly stated in the following paragraphs.
One of the many reasons I agree that we should be focused with our own environment with regards to assistance is that we do not have all the resources necessary to provide for all the continent. The world at large is made of over seven billion people and so is the need of this multitude. For example, Nigeria alone as a country is well over-populated and this is one of the major reason her government is unable to provide adequately for it's citizens. It is therefore wiser to help a some nearby societies with the available man-power than to be overburden with the need of more people.
Another reason to consider rendering support to our country rather than other countries is that the the problem of border restrictions is knocked out. This challenge makes it difficult to reach people in all countries. It is easier to meet the needs of people in our country because there is no need for Visa or immigration protocols in order to reach those in need. For instance, a lot of people died in Somalia of famine in 1984 before the trailer load of food stuffs could reach them. This was so because the food products took so long before it was cleared from the border.
In conclusion, I completely agree with the idea that we should concern ourselves with solving the needs of people in our vicinity because we do not have the resources to cater for the whole world and also it helps to avoid the border restrictions associated with offering help abroad.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, look, really, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1394.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61589403974 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53697709803 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509933774834 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.3947951827 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.166666667 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1666666667 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389020869187 0.244688304435 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131194014016 0.084324248473 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110058760278 0.0667982634062 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263686822978 0.151304729494 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107913078059 0.056905535591 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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