Whether or not someone achieves their aim is mostly by question of luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?
Many people sometimes argue that the factor of luck plays a vital role in the path way to success. Personally, I disagree with this view point and assume that the key to success not only lies in the lucky of individual but the one’s effort.
In the first place, I passionately believe that in order to meet the hard goal, people should spend most of their time on working and make a lot of effort instead of relying on their fortune. For instance, During the life of Steve Job. He had to face with a ton of unlucky situations, such as losing his own company and suffer from a rare cancer of pancreatic. However, Thanks to his determined and industrious personality he strongly tided over all difficulties of his life and obtain his marvelous dreams with the biggest technology company in the world, Apple. Another clear case of determination and industry lead someone to glories is that CR7. Before he become one of the best football player this day, he has spent thoundsands of hour trainning intensively in order to complete himself, His effort in many years of his youngth finally is paid off and acknowledged by millions of football fan across the world.
In general,There are the minority of people who was luckily born in a wealthy familly or posses a special talent. However not all of them can make the most their favour, without diligent working and endeavours. However, in some rare cases, lucky still is the decisive factor. For instance, in a football match, when two teams seem to be equal in every terms, victory or defeat is decided just by a lucky situation.
In conclusion, for the reasons I have mentioned above, I strongly believe that in order to achieve objectives in life, one must be extremely determined and hardworking to follow his or her passion till the end.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, so, still, for instance, in conclusion, in general, such as, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1482.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73482428115 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64184992487 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610223642173 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.4418457541 49.4020404114 177% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.5 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0833333333 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41666666667 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0720195071269 0.244688304435 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0270741015686 0.084324248473 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0321054667031 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0404318283448 0.151304729494 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00833886262288 0.056905535591 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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