Women should give up their jobs and go back to their traditional roles of home maker in order to reduce world’s unemployment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
I am completely opposed to sexual discrimination. There is an unreasonable idea that women should work as a full-time home maker to reduce unemployment. Followings are my main arguments.
First, in fact, there are so many women better than men at various fields such as science, literature and politics. For example, Marie Curie is one of the most influential scientist in human history with her chemical explores and devotions to science. In my country, the Vice-president, an admirable woman, has more political power and contributions than the President. It was she that has directly run the national plan to eliminate poverty for last 7 years, helping 20 million people reach their basic needs. Mental ability of women is equal to men, and in some particular fields they are more skilful than men. In my country, after thousands of years being dominant by men, this year most of precious literature awards is received by female writers.
Second, forcing women to leave their offices will lead to a huge chaos in the international economy. In reality, Japanese government has an opposed ideas, encouraging women to participate in workforce. Local men are not satisfying the need of labor in the third largest economy of the world. In global scale, if women, almost a half of labors in the world, would leave their recent jobs and spend all time on taking care of their home and family, the economic scale would have suddenly reduced to a half of what it is now. Recession would cover every country and the unemployment rates would dramatically raise.
In short, we cannot sacrifice women's freedom to solve the unemployment problem. With admirable talents, female workers are indispensible in their office. Due to their crucial role in business, firing them just cause a huge damage for our economy. Moreover, fairness is one of the core values that make our civilization more developed.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'idea'?
Suggestion: idea
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'huge damage'.
Suggestion: huge damage
...ole in business, firing them just cause a huge damage for our economy. Moreover, fairness is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, so, third, for example, in fact, in short, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1590.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07987220447 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8152603396 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.645367412141 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.9501729748 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3333333333 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3888888889 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 7.06120827912 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190342473014 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0479862555576 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623808313663 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11411160006 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524658299134 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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