Young people who commit crimes should be treated in the same as as adults who commit crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree
It is true that young individuals who break the law should be punished as same as the old lawbreakers. While I accept that treating the young criminals and the old ones equally tends to provide benefits for them and the society, I believe that this move can change their lives for the worse.
On the one hand, I would concur that applying similar law for both young and old people committing crimes may bring advantages to teenagers and the community. Firstly, by punishing young criminals, the crime rate can be reduce significantly. For example, being threatened by serious laws, young lawbreakers will be inclined to control their behaviour and follow the rule. Secondly, by doing this, the authorities could not only keep the young under discipline but also help them to stand a better chance of revising their lives. If young individuals who commit crimes are punished by the rule, they will gain a better knowledge of responsibility and distinguish between the right and the wrong. Consequently, this move might enable the government to establish innocent and clever generations.
On the other hand, I believe that treating young criminals in the same as the adults can have detrimental influences on their lives. As young generation breaking the law are not aware of consequences of their crimes completely, the society, therefore, should encourage them to realise it and prevent them from other criminal activities. For instance, being motivated by other lawbreakers, teenagers tend to commit crimes easily such as drug addition, robbing or gambling. Furthermore, my opinion is that the authorities should help young individuals to cultivate a better understanding of their crimes and fix it instead of pushing them into prison. If they have to go to jail, their social lives and mentalities can be ruined. As a result, young individuals should not be treated in the same as the adults when they commit crimes.
In conclusion, I believe that teenagers should be educated and encouraged to fix their faults than punished by the law, instead.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1716.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10714285714 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84485826315 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508928571429 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 520.2 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.318092127 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.4 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0666666667 7.06120827912 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301999634662 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113900197915 0.084324248473 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0917167227988 0.0667982634062 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172241200881 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0737632942087 0.056905535591 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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