Adults today do not do enough exercise. Some people believe that showing major sports events like the Olympics or the World Cup on television encourages people to exercise. Others argue that there are better ways to encourage adults to move more.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
With the advancement in technology, the fundamentals and dynamics of lifestyle have been altered significantly. In a recent phenomenon, the increasing tendency has been observed in people spending more time in-house by using gadgets. This, in result, has started a heated debate between people having a diversion in opinions based on the preferential method of promoting physical exercise among matures. A school of thought thinks that mature people can be motivated more by telecasting more sports events, while other refutes this and thinks otherwise. In my opinion, there are more realistic solutions available regarding this issue.
The proponents of telecasting sports events say that the reach of these events, along with athletes following, is unmatchable. The events like Olympics and Football World Cup have been telecasted around 180+ countries in the world. Due to this, these events enjoy a massive reach. Additionally, the athletes and soccer players participate in these events also have following in millions. Mature people idealise their athletes, and they try to imitate them in every possible manner. Hence, by showing them consistently on TVs encourage people to imitate their favourite players. For instance, last year’s world heavyweight champion, Salman Ahmed, has started training after watching Virat Kohli fitness during the matches. However, the actual number of people who adopt exercise by watching these events are insignificant.
The opponents of telecasting mega-events think there are many better ways to promote exercise in adults. Firstly, mature people should be provided with work-out breaks during office hours. The adults spend almost 12 hours in offices, including office commute. This, in result, leaves them with no time for exercise. Hence, they can be encouraged to focus on physical fitness by giving them work-out breaks during their office hours. Secondly, instead of watching sports, people should be encouraged to take part in physical sports, which can increase their fitness massively. The physical sports events should be organised by companies so that they participate in sports. For instance, a recent study by Harward University shows that companies with departmental sports teams have fitter employees as compare to companies who do not have departmental sports teams.
To conclude, the evidence discussed above provides strong support that despite having a viewership of events and athletes in billion, the actual turn-around of people to engage in physical activities is significantly low. On the other hand, providing exercise facilities and work-out breaks at the workplace are more adaptable solutions.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: You should probably use 'sport'.
Suggestion: sport
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Message: Use simply: 'a billion'.
Suggestion: a billion
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 41.998997996 164% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2286.0 1615.20841683 142% => OK
No of words: 403.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.67245657568 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79383089592 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543424317618 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 702.9 506.74238477 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 13.0 2.52805611222 514% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.2344264744 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.3913043478 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5217391304 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5652173913 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235516442151 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0605895151543 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0351961868737 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127817961647 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320575299982 0.056905535591 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.31 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 78.4519038076 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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