In many societies, elderly people often live in retirement homes. This is not appropriate because families should always care for their aging members. Do you agree?
It is considered that elderly people should care by their family and not to live in the retirement homes. I completely agree with this opinion and think it is a responsibility for a family to care their aging members.
First of all, elders need someone to take care of them and they especially with it could be their family or someone they know. As all the human will get old one day, they are not able to work and even some of them suffer from illness. At this period of human life, elders might feel frustrated and lonely, so I believe that family is the best carer for them and can support them more than living in a retirement homes.
Secondly, sending elders to live in retirement homes is a way that have someone to look after them, but there are some retirement homes operating without a professional license. It could let elders live in dangers as we do not know what is happening when they are in retirement homes. For example, there was a news found a video record that a 75 years old elder was bullying by a staff in aged care centre, because he vomited food several times while the staff fed him. It was a shocked news. So I believe family¡¦s care is better than aged care centre.
In conclusion, I strongly agree that it is not appropriate to send elderly people to retirement homes as elders generally wish to be together with family and the uncertainty of professional quality of aged care centre could lead elders in danger.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 478, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'shocked news'.
Suggestion: shocked news
...l times while the staff fed him. It was a shocked news. So I believe family¡¦s care is better ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, while, even so, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1191.0 1615.20841683 74% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52851711027 5.12529762239 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47849254566 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524714828897 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 390.6 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.1399194991 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.272727273 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9090909091 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.09090909091 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406918037468 0.244688304435 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165916442835 0.084324248473 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12901712494 0.0667982634062 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288501833452 0.151304729494 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.142790774337 0.056905535591 251% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.29 12.4159519038 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 78.4519038076 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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