Music should be taught in school along with other subjects like computer and science. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Nowadays, Children are being taught with more subjects, and it is becoming a burden for them. Some schools are considering including music as of their syllabus, but others believe this would add more distress on students. In my opinion, I strong agree to thought, as some pupils feel very tired of learning existing subjects and by including music can cause lack of interest and unwanted pain for their parents, which will be discussed in the following passage.
Some educations institutions have included music to their syllabus with various intents, first to educate and create interest in music; to second it will also be revenue generating option too. For instance, my child’s school introduced music to their curriculum a year ago, where many pupils show lack of interest in engrossing their knowledge. Hence, the current syllabus is creating enormous pressure and by including music will create mental agony among some pupils.
In addition, many parents believe that by including music in existing subjects will aid them to easily acquire at young age, but some parents feel it creates a financial expense in buying require musical instruments for their children to practise. For example, my neighbour unable to pay tuition fees for their kids, in such instance including music course will annoy them to a great extent. More over, pupils will not find time to learn the course due to existing subject load. There fore, considering more financial burden for some parents and in sufficient time for some children it is always advisable not to include music subject in schools.
To sum up, some pupils are not interested in learning music as part of their curriculum; hence, it is recommended not to include them, which will be welcomed by some financially poor parents.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 308, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to exist'.
Suggestion: to exist
...some pupils feel very tired of learning existing subjects and by including music can cau...
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Line 3, column 479, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: Therefore
...he course due to existing subject load. There fore, considering more financial burden for ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, second, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in my opinion, to sum up, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1491.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12371134021 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5852523965 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546391752577 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.898050751 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.545454545 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4545454545 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9090909091 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144311321126 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707401964491 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428490957812 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103506720509 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0581496859732 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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