Nowadays most people learn academic study in university, but others think we should encourage to learn vocational skills more, do you agree or disagree?
The idea that whether the studying of academic knowledge is superior to learning vocational training has remained a source of controversy. While I accept that focusing on a narrow range of subjects related to a particular career is associated with some benefits, I contend that the priority of academic study is far more advantageous.
On the one hand, there are two compelling reasons as to why I concede that there are a few merits to advocate vocational training. From the perspective of learners, zeroing in on vocational skills can help them secure well-paid jobs quickly compared with those who are specialists. This is because those who study job-related education tend to be educated in the less time period than university students. Another convincing reason is that stimulating to learn vocational skills may exert positive effects on the balance of the workforce in the community. To explain, in many third-world countries there is a scarcity of the skilled/competent workers which only be resolved if the government prioritizes vocational training.
What I want to rebut, however, is that the immense value of academic study at university cannot be ignored. The most glaring merit is that those who receive a university education have plenty of room for career development. This is because they have access to rich knowledge and manifold techniques which are significant for their works in the future. In addition, studying at a university can provide students with not only career-oriented knowledge but also other experience and skills such as self-care, communication, and time-management skills. University students, as a consequence, may have unlimited potentials in various aspects and be overall development person.
In conclusion, although job-related training is associated with some benefits such as helping learner get jobs quickly, my stand is that compared with vocational training schools, receiving university education is more feasible and rational because it helps students become a person with rich knowledge as well as accomplish comprehensive development.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, third, well, while, as to, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1778.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53894080997 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20544853061 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560747663551 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.6909648808 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.769230769 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6923076923 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23076923077 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151828381424 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581663069796 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498586978093 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0974185319414 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053413333097 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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