School teachers are more responsible for the social and intellectual development of students than parents.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Over the passage of time,the world has undergone tremendous changes.
Teachers are inextricably linked with student’s lives and inculcate all the basic etiquettes in them. This is quite evident that Learners share a different bond with their mentors. Thus some people reckon that teachers are more responsible for the social and intellectual development of pupils than their parents. I agree with this statement and will explicate my views in upcoming paragraphs.
The first and foremost reason to substantiate my belief is that tutors are highly educated and experienced persons and well aware with the psychology of the small kids. Pedagogues can teach to students in well efficient way because learners have a very delicate heart and mind.
When teachers teach them about discipline, respect other and sharing, then automatically students grasp these factors and apply in their real life. Eventually, children become a responsible denizen of a country and perform their responsibilities in an effective manner.
Besides this, teachers are the real role model for some students,as children spend large chunk of their time in schools with their teacher. As a result, teacher’s actions have a great influence on the intellect of learners and they follow the actual path and methods , which they learn from their teachers. Tutors have positive impact on student’s brain and help them to develop their cognitive skills by making them more strong and competitive for upcoming period.
Moreover, school teachers assist children by giving them more exposure in term of their education. As pedagogues give various assignments and project to children for preparing with a team. In this way, students interact with other peers and perform their tasks . As a result, they develop numerous skills as leadership and teamwork, which cannot be possible at home with parents.
To conclude, teachers are the torch-bearer for pupils and always lead them to the right path of the life. Tutors have more responsibilities in making students more capable for performing every intricate work with the intelligence. Though, students are as a clay and can be molded into any shape , this is the moral responsibility of a teacher to polish them and make them diamonds of nation. — with Ielts Asia.
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Suggest to improve mah
Suggest to improve mah writing last tym i got overall writing band 7
You have good language, but
You have good language, but the topic is not exactly right on the topic. need to compare to parents, look at the topic:
School teachers are more responsible for the social and intellectual development of students than parents.
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also I see that e-grade gave you 7 out of 9 too, it means e-grade is very accurate.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, moreover, so, then, thus, well, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1945.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 362.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3729281768 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88787474418 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569060773481 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1445933259 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.25 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.15 7.06120827912 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217822271077 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705252286771 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0743066454294 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102493174622 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0688611582482 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.