Should young people follow older people’s example or it’s good for them to challenge older people’s opinions and thoughts. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
People have different views on how young citizens should plan their future. Some assert that they should copy the older generations’ path. While I would agree with others who encourage young people to think differently.
The fact that young people could better fit in society is one of the reasons why people are in favour of following tradition. This because in many countries, people still have a stereotype of what a woman or man should do, and following this stereotype will make an individual more acceptable in society. For example, many girls want to be an elementary school teacher or a nurse, as these jobs are the most ideal jobs for a female. And women who conduct these jobs are the most popular ones in the marriage market. Therefore, following the tradition is beneficial to become popular in society.
Nevertheless, I agree with people who believe challenging old traditions is a better choice. The reason is that people live in an ever-changing world, which means what worked before might not work in modern society. For instance, in the past, people believed that men and women should get married in their 20s, however, this is impractical to modern young couples. This is because most young citizens are either busy with pursuing a higher degree or building up their careers in their 20s. Starting a family at such an early age will make these ambitious young people lose chances to achieve their potential and become less competitive in society.
In conclusion, it is true that follow the old steps will benefit people in some way, but I would argue young generations should try to make changes, as only by doing this, they can keep up with fast development of the world, and become more competent in society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 145, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... copy the older generations' path. While I would agree with others who encourage...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1450.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91525423729 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60757960881 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552542372881 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7818965814 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.571428571 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0714285714 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07142857143 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251448719867 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0917638251816 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590911747072 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163255480265 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0693406696258 0.056905535591 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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