In this day and age, shopping has become the first choice for many young people to spend their spare time. At the same time, however, there is some uncertainty to this situation and its implication for the future. In this essay I will exam the causes and seek for possible solutions.
As to the reasons, there is no doubt that the advances in technology have made the shopping process become easier than ever before, comparing to past where people had to drive to the physical stores to purchase products, young customers nowadays can easily browse and buy goods at the touch of a button by using their mobile phones or laptops. In addition, the modern materialism culture has convinced young citizens that owning more products can make them happier; therefore they choose shopping as a mean to pursue happiness.
However, this trend is not conducive to form right values or gain valuable skills for them, thus they are well advised to participate in other events. To illustrate, schools should encourage their students to do volunteer works in the local community, thereby gaining a sense of achievement, which is an imperative part of feeling satisfied. Also, by doing such works young adults are given chances to acquire and practice their communication skills and problem-solving skills, which are beneficial for them to become a responsible member of the society in the future.
To sum up, not only the new shopping method but also the current social ideology that makes youths enjoy shopping more than other activities. At the same time, however they must be motivated to engage in other events in order to cultivate a sound value system and reach their potential.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 489, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to shop'.
Suggestion: to shop
...ake them happier; therefore they choose shopping as a mean to pursue happiness. Howe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, in addition, no doubt, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1404.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01428571429 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59221755197 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632142857143 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.326393611 49.4020404114 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.4 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.3 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185978771309 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655798680371 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0384245305302 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10258333561 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0354448429959 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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