In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.
In some parts of the world, adolescents are working at the same time they are completing their studies. In my opinion, I firmly believe that it can have a detrimental influence on their curriculums, but also on their future careers and personal development.
The first reason for this is that it may be extremely difficult to cope with a job while studying at high school or during the first years of university, school years that are generally quite demanding in terms of dedication and time spent in class. In order to be able to attend his work, the student may have to skip some classes, leading to a fall in his result, complicating the access to higher studies, and finally jeopardizing a career according to his capacities.
Additionally, as the teenagers are working, they are becoming more independent and they earn their own salary. As a consequence, they will experience a false sensation of early achievements in comparison with their counterparts who are still at school, encouraging them to drop out of school. Moreover, as they feel autonomous, they may be tempted to start a family prematurely without having the maturity required, compromising definitely successful studies and their personal development in the society.
To summarize, while teenagers’ employment is widespread in some regions of the world, I would strongly object that it may produce a negative impact on young peoples’ education as they may abandon their studies and consequently it may also affect their personal lives as they may enter in adulthood too early. In order to keep the youth at school, the parents and governments should push to enforce laws prohibiting child labour and compulsory education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, if, may, moreover, so, still, while, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1425.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14440433213 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00919364392 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592057761733 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.3562615063 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.333333333 106.682146367 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.7777777778 20.7667163134 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1111111111 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151029332908 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615564438944 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0260243125669 0.0667982634062 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.089451246018 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0149755469452 0.056905535591 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 13.0946893788 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 50.2224549098 82% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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