Some older people struggle with the use of modern electronic technology such as smartphones and computers Write the causes and propose solutions

Electronic technology has growing rapidly in this modern world. This phenomenon has become a common situation for those senior residents in using those modern electronic devices.

There are two main reasons why that senior generation funds it difficult for using those modern electronic devices. Firstly, those advance technological devices is growing rapidly, therefore those elder people are difficult to follow the change of performances. They tend to familiar with the tradition way to communicate with people by homophone or watching television to engage the civil information. Secondly, physical degeneration cause them hardly to use those devices, the physical strength has restricted their movement to use those devices. For example, eye vision problems, brain operate slowly which cause them to adept the limit of word size from the screen and learning new technique slowly. Therefore, they felt it struggles to use those advance technology.

However, the way to encourage these elder people to use the modern electronic devise that can achieve from the local organization. Local community organization can provide a complete course whose wanted to learn it. For example, in Taiwan, the local governments have provided variety courses to those citizens from computer base to smartphone use so they can lean it step by step, from beginner to intermediate level, and those courses are provided for free. Children can encourage their parent to join those course as well as helping them to practice it at home.

In conclusion, although there are still a few people are struggle in use of those modern electronic devices, but I believe that children can encourage those senior people to join the course and them will finally nail it.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (2 votes)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 461, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this device' or 'those devices'?
Suggestion: this device; those devices
...l degeneration cause them hardly to use those device, the physical strength have restrict th...
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Line 3, column 502, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'restricted'.
Suggestion: restricted
...hose device, the physical strength have restrict their movement to use those devices. Fo...
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Line 3, column 727, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'struggles'?
Suggestion: struggles
...chnique slowly. Therefore, they felt it struggle to use those advance technology. How...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1470.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36496350365 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69342076631 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551094890511 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8665733466 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.076923077 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0769230769 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.76923076923 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21525698753 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0879430845357 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539854930661 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150002836068 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0360079706513 0.056905535591 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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