Pollution is a serious problem up-to-date that certainly caused by resident habit or industry. In the first reason, there are many activities to call up people to improve themselves, but it needs to take a long time for those change. To deal with the second reason, governments propose an efficient law as an increase in taxes. However, other people think that governments should have better actions that can roughly improve the environment. In my view, those methods need, you and I should protect the earth for the next generation and industrial companies have to do the same thing.
There are many reports or news show that companies in food, fabrication, essential material (steel, oil) or electricity make serious damage to the environment around them. After duty people test all process, they found that those companies cut down the final step of making clean garbage to spend a huge amount of money. Otherwise, residents who live behind have to bear with a terrible living condition. In addition, air, water, land become pollution with many overcome index. Even the environment can detect those illegal actions, it is difficult to return an original state because of extreme high-cost problems and time-consuming. For this reason, governments give a solution that increasing higher taxes for every industrial company. that should be a great law. it permits control better industrial company and obtains the fee for refresh environment. However, this rule can not be a perfect solution to prevent illegal activities and protect the environment from the company such as Formosa in Vietnam who make pollution for 9 cities in the center of Vietnam. They can deposit fine money easily but sometimes and somewhere money cannot help us turn back in-situ condition. That is the reason why I think governments should have better ways to solve and rescue environment as soon as possible. Even it can cause many disadvantages for small industrial companies to face many taxes and fee.
Recently, Challenge for Change is very famous over the world. Whereas people will clean anywhere they want to make it beautiful again. our world needs such actions. Eventually, the best way is to change people mind, that help them understand how good if the get a better environment and they have to act for this change, every, everywhere, even small action. for industrial companies, to encounter this, government have to control inside the company by applied IoT (Internet of Thing) technology that can analyze waste immediately. This method can help police have precise decide and reduce abnormal actions.
In conclusion, even though collecting higher taxes on environmental grounds is a good option. We need to combine it with others to have a better effect. That is not only changing the environment for a short time, but we should also change our mind, our habit to save the world. Furthermore, applying technology in environmental management is a good way and increase roughly fine money that evenr better than increase taxes.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, whereas, as for, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2523.0 1615.20841683 156% => OK
No of words: 492.0 315.596192385 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12804878049 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71939598352 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 176.041082164 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534552845528 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 792.9 506.74238477 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 5.43587174349 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 16.0721442886 168% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2681993959 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4444444444 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2222222222 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77777777778 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.67935871743 196% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180335428558 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0517799166842 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445045901305 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114268685061 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295768868631 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.